I personally think it was pretty good. Very descriptive and detailed. Although I do agree with Kevin to a point. You have a great platform for a great story. But to make it even better and top notch you need to get the facts perfect. Like the TQ numbers, and the Rev numbers. But, those are easy fixes. Other than that, it was a great story. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Where's Chapter 1, I can't find it.