|12-22-2003 08:31 PM|
|dinger||HRK, you show some potential. Check out your local library, ebay, or some used book stores for books by Henry Gregor Felson. He wrote hot rod stories back in the fifties, I think you'd like him, he's a good story teller. Dan|
|12-22-2003 05:43 PM|
Kid you have a gift; And I suggest to you keeping the pen to the padd and you will write enough stories to really see that 9 second car parked in your driveway KEEP IT UP!!!!
|12-22-2003 02:22 PM|
I will try.....(and by try I mean when I am bored).....to write some more over X-mas break. I have a few chances now to write, but if I feel like it I am sure I can get around to it. YAWN!!!
|12-22-2003 01:31 PM|
Very nice HRK.I used to write some stories myself,but nothing like that.I might have to pick up my pen and go to work again !
Keep up the good work!!
|12-22-2003 12:53 PM|
|12-22-2003 12:23 AM|
Here hrk.. this was the version u sent me "Enjoy NOS. Let me know if you like it and I will continue.
The behemoth pulls up to the light on Main Street between two ricers, a Honda Civic and a Mitsubishi Eclipse. In the Civic is a spike haired Hmong, about 20. In the Eclipse is a bald-headed Mexican wearing a red bandana, maybe 24. Billy revs up the engine to about 1,500 RPM’s and both ricers look over. The Eclipse give a fart back just as the Civic turns on some high tempo techno music and turns left.
The light turns green and Billy punches it. The dual pro-street tires smoke and the 39 Ford pulls out ahead of the Eclipse.
Billy slams it into 2nd gear as the Eclipse pulls up next to the Ford. Both drivers make eye contact for at least 15 seconds until Billy hits it into 3rd gear.
As Billy shifts it into 3rd speed, Pete glances over and the ricer boy hits a couple shots of Nos. The Mexican eyes bulge as the Mitsubishi falls way behind the Ford and a broken drive shaft sends sparks all over the empty pavement.
“What happened?” asks Pete to Billy
“Should we go help?” says Billy answering his own question by putting the car into park.
As Billy and Pete walk up to the Eclipse, the Mexican comes out of his car with a crowbar.
“You broke my car homes, now you must pay chico!”
The man runs toward Billy swinging the crowbar like a madman. Billy does a kungfu chop to the mans forearm causing him to drop the bar. The man tries to punch Billy but he catches his fist and puts it behind his back and throws him to the cement.
“It’s not my fault man, blame it on your cheap Mitsubishi products. I will help you fix it but you will have to pay for it.” Says Billy helping the man up.
“Thanks my name is Manuel. Wanna go get a drink?” asks Manuel.
“I’m only 16 but if you’re interested in buying me a Soda, I will be much obliged.” Says Billy as the three of them walk towards the bar labeled “Smokey’s Lounge and Grill."
Now u dont have to keep writing 2 different versions.. but u do have to keep writing.. lol..
Looking for chapter 3
|10-15-2003 05:09 PM|
|drgnwgn289||Thats pretty good kid...keep it up. I'll be lookin for chapter 3|
|10-15-2003 04:40 AM|
|Kevin45||Mention "vixens" and Larry wakes up from a deep sleep!! HAHA!!|
|10-15-2003 12:28 AM|
|crazy larry||whats with all this talk about "vixens"???|
|10-14-2003 08:17 PM|
I think you mean Rick (Kane), not Lance. Haole!
|10-14-2003 05:06 PM|
No you need the RPM's higher to pull the wheels off the ground, try maybe 5000-6000. You can also tone the the HP and Torque. You can pull the wheels with 500 HP and less. Squeezing more HP is costly, and might be a little out of reach for the youngin's...you're kinda getting into the strip ranges over 500.
I don't know if you ever rode in a stock '67 GTO pushing a little better than 300HP, but a girlfriend of mine had one and took me for a ride. Whoa! She said for kicks she would take chewing gum and stick a $20 bill on the dash in the middle...told the guys they could keep it if they could grab it while she was accelerating. She might have been BS'n a little, but it sure is hard to move when those babies accelerate! I think she probably scared the mess out of the guys when she got up around 85 in no time flat.
There was another "Vixen" I knew of. The girl was a tall, thin, attractive brunette. I was in a car when my dad ran behind his buddy who was racing her. She had a sleeper '69 Z-28 with a 302 in a partially rusted shell...it didn't look too fast at all. It was one of those white ones with orange stripes...with the rust and all, it looked pretty tacky. I just heard my dad's buddy say, "If you beat me, you can eat me!" Little nubbin' I was, I didn't know what that meant either.
Well dad's buddy in his 350 '68 Camaro was not even a close match, and that guy had a cam and could lift the wheels on his Camaro. They raced on an interstate and dad slowed down far in the shadows when he got to 115...guess he didn't want to be too bad of an influence on me. I never heard of anyone beating her in that Camaro either.
Its good that you're writing, that's real kewl, and you're good at it for your age. Do yourself a favor and ride in these beasts as often as you get a chance to get a real "feel" for the HP and torque.
|10-14-2003 04:05 PM|
Whers Chapter 3
|10-13-2003 03:16 PM|
I was plannning to have Billy look up Stephanie and find out more about her. She will be from someone in the stories past. It's gonna be a shocker.
I understand that I am not making this very realistic but try to understand that I dont know very much about engines and cars, even though I enjoy them.
Billy wont be calling Pete, Peter anymore.
RPM's and tourque will be smaller thanks to you letting me know.
I hope you like it so far.
|10-13-2003 01:12 PM|
Dreams don't have to stay on paper Kid, the ones that are attainable are always worth your hard work. Your writing is getting better. Open your mind's creative box and see what lets itself out, don't try to force originality. And the best advice I can give is what my dear 'ol mom told me when I was just a little *****.
"Lord, grant me the SERENITY to accept the things I cannot change, the COURAGE to change the things that I can, and the WISDOM to know the difference."
Keep it up man, you'll get to where you're going.
|10-12-2003 09:00 PM|
|BstMech||Maybe you could make Billy's love interest a devout ricer chick. Maybe even make her turn out to be Pete's long lost daughter who's mother is a woman from his past racing days of travelling the circuits. She should be resentful of Pete for not being there for her all these years. In fact you could go another step and make her stepdad an old rival of Pete's from the racing days. Except her stepdad made it big time in the racing scene, but is a pompous big headed egomaniac that doesn't really treat her mother or herself right. That way you could really make it a showdown of the old timers battling vicariously through the kids. Yeah it's formulaic to a point, but you could easily show your flare for writing if you have a foundation first. The rest is just story telling, that's what it really is.|
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